I looked at your pitch and thought - what? Then I suddenly realised: it's a poem. Of course You get so used to reading prose pitches as precis of stories that you tend to forget there are a million other ways to write a pitch. Firstly, I have to say this is the best set out volume of poetry I've come across... And to the poems themselves? Very well written... Blank verse is your forte and you don't privilege yourself in the way that amateur writers often tend to. Your writing is spare and descriptive, evoking an atmosphere... You have some very good lines, too, like these from 'So What':...

I looked at your pitch and thought - what? Then I suddenly realised: it's a poem. Of course You get so used to reading prose pitches as precis of stories that you tend to forget there are a million other ways to write a pitch. Firstly, I have to say this is the best set out volume of poetry I've come across... And to the poems themselves? Very well written... Blank verse is your forte and you don't privilege yourself in the way that amateur writers often tend to. Your writing is spare and descriptive, evoking an atmosphere... You have some very good lines, too, like these from 'So What'...